MysterionMuffles Posted December 18, 2013 Share Posted December 18, 2013 I would love to hear your thoughts on this set of lyrics I've been working on. I have a preset intention on what I want to convey with these lyrics, but I would also like to see how you guys interpret it. Monkeys in the Mirror Your inability to look at yourself Is a condemnation to a wretched hell Full of remorse and reactionAttempting to absolve ownership for your actions Monkey see and monkey do They're just mirrors to you When you hand raise the beast All they learn is defeat Physical correction is incorrect within itself When your demands are often defied Don't you dare, no don't you dare act so surprised When they take their violence out on other kids Don't you wonder, wonder why they had to blow their lids? Monkey see and monkey do They're just mirrors to you When you hand raise the beast All they learn is defeat You'll only get what you give 'Cause they learn what they live So when you hand raise the beast All they learn is defeat Every time that I hear the excuse That I just did the best that I could It makes me sick, yeah it makes me sick, sick to my stomach How no one seems to, no one seems to, no one seems to get it I haven't done this in my song writing life, but I would be open to some feedback and criticism on my lyrics for once. If I can improve on my delivery or if syntax needs adjustment. You name it, I'll take it into consideration if the changes fit the singing pattern. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
crops Posted January 31, 2014 Share Posted January 31, 2014 whats your music style like? ive thought about ideas like this. i find most help the world type music comes across like they half mean it and not fully convinced themselves. like with majority of New world order conspiracy orientated music , theres only a couple that i value the musicality off Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MysterionMuffles Posted February 19, 2014 Author Share Posted February 19, 2014 I play mathrock on my own and new oldies with my band And yeah it's tough to find artists whose messages are genuine and not corporate manipulation Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andre1332 Posted March 18, 2015 Share Posted March 18, 2015 You should consider making other two sounds, one about the impacts from the child viewpoint, the other with the solution, peaceful parenting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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